#Friday Flash: Lola

(Warning: mature subject matter)

It’s not her fault. She wasn’t born with the ability to see things as they are. Her world is small and skewed, complete with a turnstile and ticket price that no one can afford, a glittery fantasy in the background. If only I hadn’t fallen for her, maybe I’d still be alive.

What? You don’t think the dead can talk? You’ll see. The world is nothing like you think. Because you’re looking through the same damn filter as her—life. Her name is Lola.

Lola was given her name by a mother who was fond of whimsy and ignorant of 20th century literature. Lola struggled from whimsy like a butterfly, all wet and sticky with new wings to try out. When she turned eighteen, she did just that. She flew. She changed her name to Ekaterina because she liked the idea of being difficult, a struggle for the tongue and mouth. I refused to call her anything but Lola but I paid for that dearly.

This is how she gained a wide berth in life. Like those hoarders who pile things around themselves; newspapers, canned peaches, fat and feral cats. She piled tragedy of her own making. She was the fire that danced within the paper, burning anyone attracted to her flame.

Where did I meet her you ask? Where do you think a girl named Lola with hips that could charm a snake would hang out? Don’t judge me. I was newly divorced. I just wanted a girl to look at me again with something other than distain. I used my full week’s paycheck that night to keep her in the private room. I don’t know what she saw in me, but she agreed to a real date that night.

Our first date happened on a rainy Wednesday, with one of those sunsets that looks like somebody drizzled hot caramel all over the sky. She was soft and pliable, legs like vices. I remember staring up at that sunset–flesh pressed in wet sand while those hips made perfect warm circles—thinking I could die right then a happy man.

I didn’t know then I would die a very, very unhappy man.

By our fifth date, Lola had another life growing inside that tan belly of hers. She said it was mine and we talked about the nursery. I could smell the lemon yellow paint she picked out for the walls, so boy or girl…our baby would wake every morning to a bright sunshiny world. A world full of light and hope and promise.

She seemed surprised when her belly grew taught over the round life. She stopped eating anything but celery sticks and lemons. Her routines grew more and more dangerous, hanging upside-down and sliding toward the ground like she wanted to crack her own skull open.

On a Saturday night at two in the morning, that’s exactly what she did. The hospital lights were so bright. The doctor’s voices, the machines. So loud. The blood, so red.

Flowers everywhere the next morning. God, the smell was suffocating, all sweet, sticky…like a funeral. Of course, it was a funeral. Our baby was dead. Jarred from Lola’s body from the impact and thrown in some hospital disposal unit.  Her tears were real, pooling in the dark crevices under her eyes. I fingered a creamy white petal from a close boquet, not knowing how to express my sadness, feeling like a stranger at my own child’s funeral.

The card was just a card, but to me it was the final blow that shattered my delusion that she would ever be mine. ‘Wishing you a speedy recovery, Katerina. Get back to us soon. Love, Giovonni.’

I plucked it from its plastic stake and tore it into tiny pieces. I stuck my face into hers; the rage, the sorrow, everything piling up and collapsing in that one moment like an avalanche of the soul. “Who are you? I loved you!” I screamed.

My own spit shining on her pale cheeks, she answered, “I never asked to be loved.”

I admit. It was a stupid thing to do. We were ten stories up and the goddamned window would have held if a psycho adrenelin rage wasn’t behind the force thrown against it. For one brief second I was free of her. The silence of pavement against brain was heaven.

Then I was back. Standing in her hospital room, attached to her with some kind of damn emotional  bungee cord.

I’m not sure how long I’ve been attached to this beautiful, tragic creature. I lost track of the nights she spent throwing herself into one hell after another, not with abandon, but with the confidence of a martyr.

She’s right. I see that now. She never asked to be loved.

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  1. #1 by jackroth on June 25, 2010 - 1:49 am

    Well Ms. Shannon… you’ve told quite the tale. Well done…. well done.

    Jack

  2. #2 by Jim Bronyaur on June 25, 2010 - 1:51 am

    La..la..la.. lola…

    I highly doubt this was what The Kinks were singing about, eh? But anyways… what a slammer of a story! The voice, the descriptions, and the heart breaking ending… I enjoyed this one!

    Jim B.

  3. #3 by Gracie on June 25, 2010 - 2:06 am

    Perfect, horrifying, killer story. Your writing is beautiful. I’m still a bit breathless.

    Simply excellent.

  4. #4 by Cathy Olliffe on June 25, 2010 - 2:59 am

    Breathless, yes Grace, I didn’t realize I was holding mine until the end.
    SHANNON! Amazing, amazing. Great story. Loved every bit of it. *bowing to the master*
    You never cease to amaze me.

  5. #5 by Cecilia Dominic on June 25, 2010 - 3:01 am

    Wow, what a great character! Creative way to talk about her, too, through the eyes of her dead lover.

    CD

  6. #6 by John Wiswell on June 25, 2010 - 3:32 am

    Every man has met a Lola. Some are unfortunate enough to survive.

    Very sharp, Shannon. This could definitely sell to pulpy, crimey and horrory zines if you wanted to shoot for a reprint.

  7. #7 by marc nash on June 25, 2010 - 7:40 am

    Hey Shannon this was beautifully rendered. Finely woven language and metaphor and a wonderfully fresh take on a well-worn theme. Loved the silhouette at the top as well

  8. #8 by Jen Brubacher on June 25, 2010 - 11:05 am

    Great language, and a palpably tragic tale. For the record, I hate guys like this. I think it’s mostly their fault.

  9. #9 by Alan W. Davidson on June 25, 2010 - 11:54 am

    Wow, what a sad relationship/ghost story about a love doomed to failure. What a tremendous voice.

  10. #10 by ganymeder on June 25, 2010 - 2:14 pm

    Perfect.

  11. #11 by Anticrombie on June 25, 2010 - 2:19 pm

    Welcome back. I was beginning to wonder if the summer sunshine dried the salt air into a nice, crisp cocoon around your dark side.

    Good job.

  12. #12 by karenfrommentor on June 25, 2010 - 2:45 pm

    I need a hug.
    Holy gawd that was dark. Loved the voice. Loved everything about it.
    Damn girl. You’re good.

  13. #13 by Anneke on June 25, 2010 - 3:11 pm

    Wow. Sad, and beautifully written.

  14. #14 by Laura Eno on June 25, 2010 - 4:24 pm

    Your usual gorgeous writing, Shannon! Hook the reader in and don’t let go. This was tragic but the moral of the story rang clear.

  15. #15 by ~Tim on June 25, 2010 - 5:42 pm

    Unrequited love is never a good plan. Makes for a great story here though. Well done.

  16. #16 by Eric J. Krause on June 25, 2010 - 6:25 pm

    Very cool, very dark story. Great voice in it.

  17. #17 by Deanna Schrayer on June 25, 2010 - 6:29 pm

    Shannon I’ve missed you! So glad you’re back at #fridayflash (and that I’m taking a break from writing it so I can…write – yea, write, not read). 🙂

    Enough about me – this story, as others have said, left me breathless. I was so into it every noise around me faded, and that takes A LOT! Masterful storytelling, per usual.

  18. #18 by michael j. solender on June 25, 2010 - 8:00 pm

    This is how she gained a wide birth in life. a fabulous line. Shannon, this is so mature and developed, It is a very strong piece that you should really consider publishing. You may want to expand it into a more fleshed out short, it is definitely that good. Bravo, my favorite of yours.

  19. #19 by David G Shrock on June 26, 2010 - 2:22 am

    Strong and dark, the way I like stories. Is her name Ekaterina or Katerina? Yeah.. nothing ever good comes from blowing salary on a private room.

  20. #20 by Anthony Venutolo on June 26, 2010 - 2:53 am

    Wow… lots of ‘relationship’ flashes today… Well, not told from the perspective of the dead but … killer tale told with a great ease.

  21. #21 by Michelle Dennis Evans on June 26, 2010 - 11:24 am

    thank you for the warning 🙂

  22. #22 by J. M. Strother on June 26, 2010 - 11:56 am

    Beautiful writing here, Shannon. What a tragedy, to fall in love with someone who can’t, or won’t, love back. I could feel his pain. And she is a fascinating personality.
    ~jon

  23. #23 by Mark Kerstetter on June 27, 2010 - 9:21 pm

    I love the language of this, especially the fourth paragraph: “newspapers, canned peaches, fat and feral cats” – KILLER!

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