Halloween Friday Flash #1: The Closet

The soft, throaty laugh of my new bride, the steady beat of a tropical October rain on our rented beach bungalow walls, the gurgling of champagne being poured in the candle-lit room…these are the things I heard before the noise in the closet.

A muffled thump, like a sack being dropped on the floor, startled us. Both of us held our breath. I could feel her heart flutter against my arm.

“Did you hear that?” Sarah whispered.

“Shh.” I strained to listen. The candle flickered wildly. A musky scent filled the room, like wet fur.

“What’s that smell?” I turned to her just as a flash of lighting illuminated the fear in her dark green eyes.

“Smells like an animal. Do you think the owner of this place has a cat or something?”

Bump. Thump. The noise taunted me.

She was now trembling. I had to act. There was definitely something moving in the closet.

“Where are you going?” She grabbed my arm as I carefully shifted the sheets off my legs. “Let’s just wait until morning to open it.” Her lip quivered, her eyes shone in the candlelight.

She made me want to be brave. Beauty does that. Probably some damn trick of evolution, keeping the child-bearing women out of danger and sending the replaceable males out to face the beast.

But, this was just a closet on a very populated island in a very populated strip of beach houses. No beasts here, right?

“It’s probably just the wind shifting the house. It’s blowing pretty good out there.”

A low growl and loud bang on the door answered me. I jumped back in bed and reached for the cell phone. The candle blew out and we both screamed.

“Sh, sh, it’s okay.” I pressed the buttons, hitting ‘back’ numerous times as my shaking hand refused to cooperate. The deep rumble of thunder and crack of lighting close by made Sarah jump and slide deeper under the sheets.

Relief at finally hearing the landlord’s voice quelled some of my fear, made it almost seem silly.

“Mr. Crawford? Hi, I don’t mean to bother you in the middle of the night, but we’re in Bungalow number six and heard a strange noise in the closet. We’re wondering if someone might have possibly left a cat here? Oh, okay. Yes, that’s probably it, thank you.” I hung up and relit the candle.”He says there are strays around and one could have gotten in. It’s happened before.”

“I did notice the cats hanging around when we first got here,” she said. “But still, in the closet?”

We both stared at the closet. I thought seriously about just leaving the thing in there until morning but what if it was hurt or hungry?

With a sigh, I slid my arm from Sarah’s death grip and picked up one of the shiny black rental shoes that came with the tux. Really, this was just to make me feel braver. I’ve had spiders laugh at me when I swatted them with a shoe, I knew it would be no match for a scared, trapped cat.

I grabbed the door knob and pressed an ear to the door.

Silence.

I held my breath. Still nothing. Hm. Maybe I could just wait until morning. What would we do with a cat tonight anyway? Put it out in the rain? Better to just let it sleep in the dry closet.

“I think it’s settled in for the night, now,” I said, sliding back into bed.

“Oh, no,” Sarah said, climbing out of bed. “There’s no way I’m falling asleep without knowing what’s in that closet.”

*    *    *    *

Harold Crawford let himself into Bungalow number six.

“Here kitty kitty,” he called, moving into the bedroom. The candle had burned itself out and he stared at the items strewn about the room; a wedding gown thrown over the back of one chair, a tux jacket hanging on another, shoes, open suitcases. He slowly moved to the closet, where a woman’s nightgown lay by the door. Shoving it aside with his foot, he carefully opened the closet door and peered in.

“Ah,” he chuckled, throwing it open wide. The morning light shone on two trembling black cats. The one with green eyes hissed and howled, pushing itself closer to the body of the other one.

“Well, that’s an awful noise, my pet.”

The cats pushed their way passed him and out the opened door.

Harold Crawford watched them go and then began to gather up the abandoned things in the room.  “Well,” he sighed, lifting the wedding gown from the chair. “At least you will be keeping your vows. ‘Til death do you part.” This is the one thing he told himself to feel better.

Only four more couples and his debt would be paid.

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  1. #1 by Denise on October 8, 2010 - 2:21 am

    Weee, this was full of suspense and clever kitties. What a lovely motel manager we have in Mr Crawford. Excellent Halloween story..:)

  2. #2 by TEC4 on October 8, 2010 - 2:27 am

    What a horrible fate! (And I _like_ cats …) Shiver!

  3. #3 by John Wiswell on October 8, 2010 - 3:30 am

    You use details in rhythm as well as anybody in the #fridayflash circuit. The opening drew me in very well, and I started reading it out loud for fun. Thanks for sharing, Shannon.

  4. #4 by soesposito on October 8, 2010 - 3:32 am

    Ah, thanks…gawd I love writing in October 🙂

  5. #5 by pegjet on October 8, 2010 - 6:16 am

    This reminded me a little of a Stephen King short about raining frogs. You captured that feel and atmosphere.

  6. #6 by ~Tim on October 8, 2010 - 6:30 am

    Wait, is the moral of the story that we should avoid marriage or honeymoons? 😉

    Nice job with the spooky stuff.

  7. #7 by yearzerowriters on October 8, 2010 - 9:50 am

    I’ve had spiders laugh at me when I swatted them – that’s a great laugh out loud line!

    This was an excellent tale, particularly liked that it was a pair of cats wedded to one another and not just a lone one, thus echoing their prey

    Marc Nash

  8. #8 by Sam on October 8, 2010 - 10:29 am

    An excellent tale! I am wondering what sort of debt Mr Crawford has to pay, and how he got himself in that position in the first place.

  9. #9 by Icy Sedgwick on October 8, 2010 - 1:06 pm

    Ohhhhh I just love this!! Very inventive, and very spooky. Perfect for Halloween!

  10. #10 by Laura Eno on October 8, 2010 - 3:11 pm

    Well, they are together… Great halloween story!

  11. #11 by Deanna Schrayer on October 8, 2010 - 6:57 pm

    Don’t open that door! This is what I kept thinking, then, “whew” he didn’t, then Oh No, she made him!
    A fun ride Shannon. Thanks so much.

  12. #12 by windspiritgirl on October 8, 2010 - 8:35 pm

    Great atmosphere here that you’ve created. I am so darn curious about the debt that Harold has to pay off and why…cats? Love the juxtaposition of cats, honeymoons, debt, closets.

  13. #13 by adampb on October 9, 2010 - 1:47 am

    I love it when there are lots of possibilities to consider afterwards. Nice pacing and rhythm and some great lines from the character, particularly about shoes and spiders.
    Adam B @revhappiness

  14. #14 by Eric J. Krause on October 9, 2010 - 2:44 am

    Very creepy tale. Very interesting in whatever debt Mr. Crawford has. What could it be that he needs to lure honeymooners in to turn them into cats? And how does it happen? Excellent story!

  15. #15 by John Pender on October 9, 2010 - 1:14 pm

    I too am wondering about this debt he has to pay; why he has to turn newlyweds into cats. Intriguing story!

  16. #16 by Kari Fay on October 9, 2010 - 8:21 pm

    Great story. I’m glad to see I’m not alone in wondering what the hell that debt is!

  17. #17 by Stephen on October 11, 2010 - 2:33 am

    Cool twist. Just when I thought that maybe a cat or two ate the couple, I find out there’s more to the story. Good read, Shannon. You hooked me and kept me engaged.

  18. #18 by A. S. Boudreau on October 11, 2010 - 3:02 am

    wow. I still want to know how they turned INTO cats though! 🙂

  19. #19 by Laurita on October 12, 2010 - 4:51 pm

    I wish I had a closet that turned people into cats.

    I mean…What a good idea for a scary story. I wonder what his debt is. Not knowing makes it all the more chilling, and fun.

  20. #20 by mazzz in Leeds on October 12, 2010 - 6:25 pm

    Heh – love and death, cat style! Most fun – and an army of stray cats in the making…. I wonder if they’ll revolt against Mr Crawford?

  21. #21 by G.P. Ching on October 14, 2010 - 2:52 am

    Purrrfect story! I love a good spooky cat tail.. I mean tale. Clever concept and I wonder about Mr. Crawford’s debt. What could the original favor have been?

  22. #22 by Cathy Olliffe on October 17, 2010 - 10:06 pm

    Such fine writing, such a grisly end!
    Your details are amazing: the wedding dress draped over a chair, open suitcases… sounds familiar to me somehow but at least I didn’t wind up dead.
    And I always fancied cats…

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