Friday Flash: The Bouy

He stood, a weathered, brown sack of bones in front of the blue sea. Soggy white cotton pants hung, dripping seawater. This was his only attire. Hands were clasped behind his back as he watched with ancient eyes over the expanse of white sand–packed with umbrellas, coolers, and tourists–to the boardwalk.

He waited.

A mother and child moved slowly toward him, picking up tiny shells and tossing them into the clear water.

His gaze turned first on the child, then on the mother. He tapped his wrist and the woman, smiling, offered him the time.

“Ten minutes to noon.”

Bowing slightly, he once again fixed his gaze on the boardwalk.

Rebecca watched this with growing apprehension. She squeezed a glob of sun block from the tube and rubbed it on her two year old’s shoulders, still unable to take her eyes from the man standing still against the motion of waves and people.

Even in the warmth of a noon summer day, a chill rolled through her. The hair on her arms stood up. Glancing around at the other families packed in around her, she tried to make herself relax. No one else was paying attention to this small, harmless looking man.

But then he moved. It was fluid like the wind. One arm waved then he pivoted and began walking into the ocean.

Rebecca swept Jilley up from the sand, a cry of protest erupted from the startled toddler as she unsuccessfully tried to grasp her doll.

Her heart was pounding as she made her way to the edge of the ocean with her daughter. The man was now submerged up to his hips and still moving forward. She moved forward, too. Jilley squeezed her neck with tight little fists and whimpered as tiny, sensitive toes touched water. Rebecca glanced around at the others in the ocean, floating on rafts, throwing balls, splashing and diving under the small waves. Then she spotted a buoy and, submerging them both in the water except for their heads, paddled as fast as she could.

Once in a while, she glanced over at the man, who now swam in strong, even strokes out to sea.

She reached the buoy, breathing hard. It was difficult to stay behind it as it bobbed up and down and she tried to hold on to it with one hand.

“Mommy cold.”

“It’s okay, Jilley,” she whispered in her little girl’s ear. Brown strands of Jilley’s damp hair stuck to her mouth as she tried to keep her voice from shaking. “Mommy needs you to  be very quiet, no crying…”

The first explosion made her jump and duck behind the buoy. Jilley began to cry but no one would hear her over the screams of thousands of terrified people. Rebecca peered around her cover and reflexively held her daughter tighter as dozens of men rushed toward the crowds, rapid bursts of fire coming from whatever kind of guns they carried.  Another explosion off to her left sent a shower of sand and bodies into the air.

Rebecca could feel her legs cramping from treading water, she was hyperventilating and swallowing water as she struggled to keep Jilley’s head up.  Turning behind her, she saw a small boat moving toward the dot that the man had become.

She watched this, coughing the salt water from her lungs, singing to Jilley, trying to block out the sound of gunfire and panic coming from the beach, while keeping the buoy between them and the killers.

The boat slowed. The man climbed up into it. A white wake streaming behind it as it sped back out to sea.

Rebecca thought about Jilley’s father in Arkansas. He moved there six months ago for a job. She should have gone with him. Worked things out. He would never forgive her if the terrorists found them. If they took Jilley from him.

There were frantic splashes to her left and right as the people in the water swam in either direction, trying to escape the chaos. More rapid gunfire, some people floated instead of swam. Face down.

“I love you, Princess Pea,” she recited in her crying child’s ear. “I love you in the morning, I love you at noon…”

The thrum of a helicopter. The bleat of incoming sirens. Her legs were lead weights.  Her heart pounded like the gunfire.

Please. Please stop.

And then it did.

A gull screamed in the long span of silence. Rebecca became aware of the breeze on her skin, tasted the salt in her mouth. The sun shone bright above them. Nothing had really changed. The world went on, despite the terror, the blood strewn sand, the families who lay dead or dying.

The world always went on. No matter how many malls, schools, airports or restaurants were blown up; no matter how many different ways man thought up to rip apart the lives of their fellow man, the earth kept spinning.

This was the first attack that she knew of on a crowded beach.

Her child lay still on her shoulder, eyes the color of the sea. open wide and staring at a woman in a red swimsuit, bloated and floating nearby.

Rebecca held her breath and turned, peering around the buoy.

Black suited men walked the beach, checked bodies, clutched guns. The helicopter had landed somewhere nearby. More sirens approached.

This week’s attack was over.

Rebecca clutched her little girl and released her hold on the buoy.

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  1. #1 by Anticrombie on December 3, 2010 - 5:21 am

    Ahhh… fear. The great equalizer. Living in our concrete wonderlands and manicured suburbs we forget that the world isn’t as civilized as our morning sunrise breakfasts promise to be. And nothing says, ‘Wake up and pay attention!” like the staccato of impersonal gunfire by faceless shadows.

    I enjoyed the fear inspired, not by what you wrote, but what you only hinted to. As if you were channeling this story through a shaky hand-held camera, being clutched by desperate hands and surrounded by stone walls.

    Kudos.

  2. #2 by soesposito on December 3, 2010 - 3:42 pm

    Spreading fear is what it’s all about for terrorists. I think they’re winning.

  3. #3 by karenfrommentor on December 3, 2010 - 3:50 pm

    Good lord that was immediate. Pulled the reader in directly. “This week’s attack” was a killer line. As though well, it’s wednesday, got that over with.

    Really well crafted Shannon.

  4. #4 by mazzz in Leeds on December 3, 2010 - 3:54 pm

    that was terrifying – moreso because of all you left out!

  5. #5 by Jen Brubacher on December 3, 2010 - 4:04 pm

    You very acutely capture what makes terrorism so frightening. And it seemed like such a nice picture to begin with. *shudder*

  6. #6 by flyingscribbler on December 3, 2010 - 4:29 pm

    Gosh, this is a frightening image of our possible future. I wondered if the man asking the time was some sort of angel to start with, sent to save her from the attack. Then, with growing horror, i realized what he was actually doing. Her intuition saved them.
    In your future, intuition is all we’ve got. That is what makes your story so damm terrifying.
    Brilliant.

  7. #7 by Gracie on December 3, 2010 - 4:56 pm

    Just stunning, Shannon. I think Karen had the perfect word for this story– immediate. The writing is powerful and slams you right into the scene. You know that man is up to no good from the first word.

    Splendid and terrifying.

  8. #8 by Eric J. Krause on December 3, 2010 - 5:00 pm

    I found the line: “This week’s attack” to be the most frighting part of the whole story. This is certainly a horror tale that could prove to be true. Good story!

  9. #9 by Adamjkeeper on December 3, 2010 - 5:31 pm

    Woah! Frightening stuff, sea water really aides the sense if panic, all that bobbing and spluttering. Whole thing was very filmic.

  10. #10 by Deanna Schrayer on December 3, 2010 - 6:56 pm

    Shannon, this sucked me in from the get go and would not turn loose. Such a sad story, and scary in that it’s so close to reality. Superb writing!

  11. #11 by Rebecca Emin on December 3, 2010 - 7:27 pm

    This is both terrifying and stunning. I was gripped from beginning to end.

    (Great name for your main character too!)

  12. #12 by Mike Robertson on December 3, 2010 - 9:40 pm

    Amazing tension right from the get-go Shannon. I wondered how she knew what was about to happen, but forgot about that as I admired her dedication to keeping her daughter alive. Strong stuff.

  13. #13 by Mark Kerstetter on December 4, 2010 - 1:07 am

    I can’t imagine living my whole life in fear. I wonder why you say they’re winning?

    • #14 by soesposito on December 4, 2010 - 2:41 pm

      I say that because this story was inspired by a real man standing on the beach just like that. A friend and I were talking about him and this is where my mind took me. With all the recent failed attacks and plots uncovered where terrorists are just content killing a bunch of people at a Christmas tree lighting ceremony…it’s not too far of a stretch to imagine this as our future.

      That said, I did grow up in an atmosphere of fear so maybe that contributes to my thought process.

  14. #15 by Stephen on December 4, 2010 - 1:59 am

    Wow, a gripping tale. It’s sad that the mother knew exacty what to do, sad that environments can condition people to such responses. Well done.

  15. #16 by Linda on December 4, 2010 - 3:11 am

    Wow, you sucked me right in all the way to the end. My heart’s thumping like mad! Like others have said, the phrase ‘this week’s attack’ socked me in the gut. I love the ending, the ambiguity of it. Bravo! Peace…

  16. #17 by Linda on December 4, 2010 - 10:52 am

    VERY much liked your story AMERICAN WHOLESALE up at The Shine. Nice work! Peace…

    • #18 by soesposito on December 4, 2010 - 2:41 pm

      Thanks for reading that, Linda!

  17. #19 by John Wiswell on December 5, 2010 - 6:55 pm

    Life in war time. Awful conditions, and yes fear is an equalizer, but it leaves everyone uneven. You got me to care for the mother and child trapped in it…

  18. #20 by Cathy Webster on December 6, 2010 - 12:34 pm

    Wow, Shannon. You are such a good writer. That was amazing.

  19. #21 by Icy Sedgwick on December 6, 2010 - 1:24 pm

    Wow, that really ramped up the tension. Excellent descriptive work.

  20. #22 by ganymeder on December 10, 2010 - 12:17 am

    Great story full of tension.

  21. #23 by alisonwells on December 10, 2010 - 11:18 am

    Really fabulous on so many levels, subversion of our cosy complacency, the determination to survive, the experience of being in war, everything turned on its head. Dramatic and gripping and ever so well written. Excellent, well done.

  22. #24 by KjM on May 15, 2011 - 2:00 am

    Wow, did that hit hard. Terrifying. I agree with Karen – the line “This week’s attack was over.” holds so much story in it.

    Excellent – terrifying – writing.

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